Monday, March 11, 2013

Extended Essay 2 - Final Draft

Charlotte Lakin

Writ 1122

Professor Leake

03/03/2013

Sandy Hook Shooting: From Local to International

News can be local, national, or international but how does this affect the way the story is reported. If something happened in a small town in Indiana you would expect the local news to report it but would a national newspaper or even an international one. If that event in the small town was incredibly tragic it is more likely that the story will reach national and international news sources. We would expect the different news stories to report the same facts but in a different manner but how different are the stories portrayed. For example, a conservative newspaper will report political information very differently to an international newspaper that is neither conservative nor liberal. How do stories change as they go from country to country? How did the story of the Sandy Hook Elementary School shooting change as it went from local to national to international news?

On December 14^th, 2012, Sandy Hook elementary school in Newtown, Connecticut unfortunately became another victim of school shootings. Adam Lanza, before shooting himself, killed 20 children, 7 teachers, and his mother. He shot his way through the school’s security system and proceeded to two classrooms shooting anyone who tried to stop him. Children either hid in closets or locked classrooms or were escorted out of the school by teachers or law enforcement officers. He used his mother’s rifle to shoot the victims and her handgun to shoot himself. Lanza was unfortunately very accurate with his shooting as all but two of the victims were pronounced dead at the scene; the other two victims were taken to the hospital where they were pronounced dead. This shooting was reported as the second deadliest school shooting after the shooting at Virginia Tech, which had 32 victims. Within the next three days newspapers all over the world had published stories about this tragic event.

The full story had only just started to surface within the three days but the local newspaper, The Newtown Bee, was already reporting an early report of the incident online on the day of the shooting. The writers of this story are from Newtown and thus would have been more greatly affected than other reporters. These deeper feelings are displayed in the article, Details and Names Slow to Emerge in Wake of School Shooting, by the use of words and phrases such as “disbelief”, “shattered with grief”, “tragic”, “grave injuries”, and “horrified”. The preliminary article is short because not many facts had been given but it shows the multitude of the law enforcement involvement and quoted the state police lieutenant reassuring that “many agencies are working together to keep you informed”(The Newtown Bee). Because The Newtown Bee is a local newspaper they added at the end of their article that a lot of the churches were opening for counselling services and that a specific church was holding a mass that night.

Though The New York Times probably won’t talk about the churches being open for counselling services the author will still add a lot of emotion to the article because this happened in their own country. Of course the article, Nation Reels After Gunman Massacres 20 Children at School in Connecticut by James Barron, will have the plain and boring facts but it will also include similar emotions to The Newtown Bee article. This article was published the same day as the shooting but goes more in depth about what happened than the local story. The New York Times article gives more detail about how Lanza got into the school and what guns he used. Also, Barron gives some insight into Lanza by quoting a law enforcement officer: “Mr. Lanza had grown up in Newtown, and he was remembered by high school classmates as smart, introverted and nervous. They said he had gone out of his way not to attract attention when he was younger”(Barron). Barron has a similar word choice to the local article to make the situation that much more real and tragic: “terrified parents”, “sobbing children”, “frightened faces of children”, and “grim faces of women”. Barron also chooses his words wisely to describe Lanza. He chooses phrases such as “brutal efficiency”, “chillingly accurate”, “evil visited this community today”, and “slaughtered the children” in order to make Lanza seem more inhumane and evil.

When we cross the Atlantic Ocean to England, the story becomes a lot less emotional and a lot more factual. The Telegraph, an English newspaper, published a story, written by Nick Allen, hours after the incident. This article is much more fact based and does not use incredibly descriptive words to give the readers a certain emotional reaction. When describing what Lanza did, Allen just presented the facts but also added, unlike The New York Times, that his brother claimed that Lanza had a personality disorder. Allen quotes ABC News for some of the facts presented but also quotes some of the witnesses and President Obama for a personal look at the incident. The New York Times uses Obama and other law enforcement officials for some facts and personal reactions, where as The Telegraph uses a parent, a student, and an unnamed witness. Even though Allen does not necessarily use as much emotion in his written words, he adds a lot of pictures to the article. The pictures depict the tragic event accurately and add to the emotions of the article. However, when reading the article, even whilst looking at the pictures, you do not get the same emotional reaction as when reading The New York Times article. Nick Allen recognizes that it is a tragic event but being so geographically far away from the event the story is slightly more removed from the emotional side of the story.

Even more removed from the situation is a story reported by the Kuwait News Agency (KUNA). They published a very short story stating what happened with few details. The described the event in a few sentences. They gave details about his past such as when he moved to Newtown, when his parents got divorced, and that “[he] reportedly enjoyed soccer, skateboarding, and video games, and had no known criminal record”(KUNA). They reported that it was the second deadliest school shooting and gave examples of the deadliest school shooting and another school shooting in Colorado. This story has little to no emotion associated with it and just states the facts of what happened.

Instead of writing a story about the facts that happened that day, Gulf News, a newspaper in the United Arab Emirates, published an article filled with comments from world leaders offering their condolences to the victims and their families. The article contains quotes from leaders from Canada, Australia, The Philippines, The European Union, and many more countries. The article contains a few sentences describing the event so that the readers know what happened including an introduction describing that “World leaders express [their] shock and horror after a gunman massacred 20 small children and six teachers Friday in the US state of Connecticut, in one of the worst school shootings in history”(Gulf News). The Gulf News takes a completely different approach than any other newspaper. Their article portrays a lot of emotion from different leaders from all over the world. This article portrays as much if not more emotion than the articles from the U.S. but does not include many facts. The readers perceive the emotions associated with the event through the eyes of others rather than creating their own emotions from reading an article about the facts of the event. This approach to the event allows readers to look at how the rest of the world is affected by the event and see how world leaders responded to it: UN chief Ban Ki-Moon wrote to the Connecticut governor giving his “‘deepest condolences at the shocking murders’. ‘The targeting of children is heinous and unthinkable,’ he added in condemning the "horrendous" crime”(Gulf News).

As the stories are reported further and further away from the U.S. they become less emotional and more fact-based. The U.K. is very connected to the U.S. so The Telegraph thoroughly reported the event with lots of detail but not as much emotion in the written word but more emotion in their choice of pictures. The New York Times was just as emotional as the local newspaper but added more details. The story reported in Kuwait was completely devoid of emotions and only presented some of the facts. However, the story from the United Arab Emirates was different to all of them because it only had a few of the details from the event but had a tremendous amount of emotion. In my opinion The New York Times’ article was the most effective because it had a lot of details but also had a lot of emotion. With an event like this, the news needs to get the facts out there but it is also important to convey the tragedy involved with the event.

Works Cited

Allen, Nick. "Connecticut School Shooting: Massacre at Sandy Hook Leaves 20 Children Dead."

The Telegraph. Telegraph Media Group, 14 Dec. 2012. Web. 5 Mar. 2013. <http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/worldnews/northamerica/usa/9746051/Connecticut-school-shooting-massacre-at-Sandy-Hook-leaves-20-children-dead.html>.

Barron, James T. "Nation Reels After Gunman Massacres 20 Children at School in Connecticut."

The New York Times. The New York Times Company, 14 Dec. 2012. Web. 5 Mar. 2013. <www.nytimes.com/2012/12/15/nyregion/shooting-reported-at-connecticut-elementary-school.html?pagewanted=all>.

"Details And Names Slow To Emerge In Wake Of School Shootings." Newtownbee.com. The

Newtown Bee, 14 Dec. 2012. Web. 5 Mar. 2013. <newtownbee.com/news/news/0001/11/30/details-and-names-slow-emerge-wake-school-shooting/4584>.

"Gunman in US School Massacre Wore Battle Fatigues, Military Vest." Kuwait News Agency.

Integrated Digital Systems, 15 Dec. 2012. Web. 5 Mar. 2013. <http://0-www.lexisnexis.com.bianca.penlib.du.edu/lnacui2api/results/docview/docview.do?docLinkInd=true&risb=21_T16834499900&format=GNBFI&sort=BOOLEAN&startDocNo=1&resultsUrlKey=29_T16834496549&cisb=22_T16834499944&treeMax=true&treeWidth=0&selRCNodeID=48&nodeStateId=101en_US,1&docsInCategory=2&csi=356951&docNo=1>.

"World Leaders Express Shock over Latest US Shooting." Gulf News. Al Nisr Publishing, 15

Dec. 2012. Web. 11 Mar. 2013. <http://gulfnews.com/news/world/usa/world-leaders-express-shock-over-latest-us-shooting-1.1118954>.

Final Thoughts

Through this course, my writing has changed to include a lot more personal thoughts. The blog posts weren’t extremely formal but they also weren’t completely informal. These blog posts allowed me to find an in-between in my writing style. They allowed me to add my opinions whilst also analyzing the piece of writing. This course allowed me to develop a completely new style of writing that I had not had much experience with before. This new style will be helpful in other course I take at DU because writing assignments are not always formal and this course has allowed me to explore that style. As far as my news-reading habits go, I would love to say that this course has changed my habits and that I will start reading the news daily or even weekly but that is just not the case. It was nice to have the ‘requirement’ to read the news but I know that I will not keep it up after this course.

Tuesday, March 5, 2013

Extended Essay 2 - First Draft

Charlotte Lakin

Writ 1122

Professor Leake

03/03/2013

An International Approach to the Sandy Hook Shooting

The full story had only just started to surface within the three days but the local newspaper, The Newtown Bee, was already reporting an early report of the incident online on the day of the shooting. The writers of this story are from Newtown and thus would have been more greatly affected than other reporters. These deeper feelings are displayed in the article, Details and Names Slow to Emerge in Wake of School Shooting, by the use of words and phrases such as “disbelief”, “shattered with grief”, “tragic”, “grave injuries”, and “horrified”. The preliminary article is short because not many facts had been given but it shows the multitude of the law enforcement involvement and quoted the state police lieutenant reassuring that “many agencies are working together to keep you informed”(The Newtown Bee). Because The Newtown Bee is a local newspaper they added at the end of their article that a lot of the churches were opening for counselling services and that a specific church was holding a mass that night.

Though The New York Times probably won’t talk about the churches being open for counselling services the author will still add a lot of emotion to the article because this happened in their own country. Of course the article, Nation Reels After Gunman Massacres 20 Children at School in Connecticut by James Barron, will have the plain and boring facts but it will also include similar emotions to The Newtown Bee article. This article was published the same day as the shooting but goes more in depth about what happened than the local story. The New York Times article gives more detail about how Lanza got into the school and what guns he used. Also, Barron gives some insight into Lanza by quoting a law enforcement officer: “Mr. Lanza had grown up in Newtown, and he was remembered by high school classmates as smart, introverted and nervous. They said he had gone out of his way not to attract attention when he was younger”(Barron). Barron has a similar word choice to the local article to make the situation that much more real and tragic: “terrified parents”, “sobbing children”, “frightened faces of children”, and “grim faces of women”. Barron also chooses his words wisely to describe Lanza. He chooses phrases such as “brutal efficiency”, “chillingly accurate”, “evil visited this community today”, and “slaughtered the children” in order to make Lanza seem more inhumane and evil.

When we cross the Atlantic Ocean to England, the story becomes a lot less emotional and a lot more factual. The Telegraph, an English newspaper, published a story, written by Nick Allen, hours after the incident. This article is much more fact based and does not use incredibly descriptive to give the readers a certain emotional reaction. When describing what Lanza did, Allen just presented the facts but also added, unlike The New York Times, that his brother claimed that Lanza had a personality disorder. Allen quotes ABC News for some of the facts presented but also quotes some of the witnesses and President Obama. The New York Times quotes Obama as well but also quotes some other officials, where as The Telegraph quotes a parent, a student, an unnamed witness, and another parent. Nick Allen recognizes that it is a tragic event but being so geographically far away from the event the story is slightly more removed from the emotional side of the story.

Even more removed from the situation is a story reported by the Kuwait News Agency (KUNA). They published a very short story stating what happened with few details. The described the event in a few sentences. They gave details about his past such as when he moved to Newtown, when his parents got divorced, and that “[he] reportedly enjoyed soccer, skateboarding, and video games, and had no known criminal record”(KUNA). They reported that it was the second deadliest school shooting and gave examples of the deadliest school shooting and another school shooting in Colorado. This story has little to no emotion associated with it and just states the facts of what happened.

As the stories are reported further and further away from the U.S. they become less emotional and more fact-based. The U.K. is very connected to the U.S. so The Telegraph thoroughly reported the event with lots of detail but not as much emotion. The New York Times was just as emotional as the local newspaper. On the other hand, the story reported in Kuwait was completely devoid of emotions and only presented some of the facts.

Works Cited

Allen, Nick. "Connecticut School Shooting: Massacre at Sandy Hook Leaves 20 Children Dead."

Barron, James T. "Nation Reels After Gunman Massacres 20 Children at School in Connecticut."

The New York Times. The New York Times Company, 14 Dec. 2012. Web. 5 Mar. 2013. <www.nytimes.com/2012/12/15/nyregion/shooting-reported-at-connecticut-elementary-school.html?pagewanted=all>.

"Details And Names Slow To Emerge In Wake Of School Shootings." Newtownbee.com. The

Newtown Bee, 14 Dec. 2012. Web. 5 Mar. 2013. <newtownbee.com/news/news/0001/11/30/details-and-names-slow-emerge-wake-school-shooting/4584>.

"Gunman in US School Massacre Wore Battle Fatigues, Military Vest." Kuwait News Agency.

Tuesday, February 26, 2013

An explosion caused by two bombs created chaos in Hyderabad, Southern India and killed 13 people. The New York Times and NBC News both reported the incident but used very different pictures to accompany the story. The New York Times used the picture below of some people in the area after the attack and one person with a dog to help discover any more bombs.

NBC News used the picture below of a man in a hospital covered in bandages after being injured during the explosion.

The picture used by the New York Times has a caption that explains the situation but without reading the caption the picture could be of any dirty street in India. The image is at the beginning of the article but it does not draw the reader into the story. If the article did not have the headline of “Deadly Bombings Hit Southern Indian City” I would assume the story were about pollution or pets or perhaps the effects of poverty on animals in third world countries. The picture is not significant enough to the story to make me relate to the picture. The position of the picture suggests that it is very important to the story but that is not the case. The article describes the tragic event well but if I were judging the article by the picture I would not necessarily want to read it. The picture does not hone in on the subject well enough. However, this picture does not affect the story once you have read the article. It simply has very little effect before the article is read. On the other hand, NBC News uses a picture that clearly relates to the story without reading the headline. Anything could have happened to put the man in a hospital but just by looking at the picture the reader knows that something tragic has happened and people have been injured. However, unlike the New York Times article the picture is not placed at the beginning of the article; it is in the middle of the article, off centre, and small. The picture shows you how badly the civilians were injured and makes you sympathize with them. The placement of this picture makes the reader realise the depth of the situation. The picture is halfway through the article so they already know that there was a bombing and people were killed and injured. However, when they see the picture they are actually looking at someone who was injured in the bombing and the story becomes that much more real and emotional. The picture enhances the story and heightens the emotional response to the story. NBC chose the picture well so that it would add depth to their story. If the picture were positioned at the beginning of the article it would have a greater effect because the reader would have already had an emotional reaction before they even read the article. Because of the initial emotions provided by the picture, if it were at the top, the reader would want to keep reading to find out what happened.

NYTimes: http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/22/world/asia/deadly-bombings-hit-southern-india-city.html?ref=asia

NBCNews: http://worldnews.nbcnews.com/_news/2013/02/21/17044448-11-killed-as-blasts-rock-shopping-area-in-hyderabad-india?lite

Tuesday, February 19, 2013

Photographs in and out of context

Errol Morris, in his column Liar, Liar, Pants on Fire, discusses the relationship between words or stories and pictures. He describes that when we look at a picture of an unknown person or object we cannot create “true” beliefs about the picture without a caption or a story. He uses an example of a picture of The Lusitania. Without any knowledge of what it is we just perceive the picture as a boat. When we look at the picture with a caption stating that it is The Lusitania we can remember what we know about the liner and its impact on history, specifically the U.S. involvement in World War I. He suggests that pictures cannot be fully understood without words. If I looked at a family photo of a random Vietnamese family I would not have any thoughts about the family other than the fact that they look Vietnamese, or even more vague Asian. However, I could make conjectures in my mind of what emotions they have and the relationships within that family. I agree to certain degree with Morris. I believe that a picture means more to us if we know what is happening in the picture or who is in the picture. Also, I agree that without the words we are just guessing as to what the picture is. With the words we can know what the truth about the photo is. This photo is not from a news site or a blog but without a context it does not mean much. It appears to be a road that only covers half of the hill. Without context you might be questioning if it is in the process of being fully built. Just from the picture you cannot tell where it was taken or any other defining factor about it.

However, if I were to add the caption “My Group’s Community Service Project for an Elementary School in Vietnam” you would start to create some other ideas about the picture. You now know that the picture was taken in Vietnam, the road was built for an elementary school as a community service picture. This caption still does not describe why we built the road or the gruelling process that went into building it. However, after the caption is added you can still know a lot about the picture and you know the context and can start thinking whether or not it is “true or false”.

Sunday, February 17, 2013

Taking an Approach

Harris discusses his idea of “taking an approach” in his book Rewriting. He describes this as when an author will write something with the style or ideas of another writer. Taking an approach can be explained as a rewriting of a text but instead of just rewriting the original piece you take the ideas of the author and the style of the author and make it your own. Harris used a good example in how a movie producer or director will take a book and use the story and the author’s style to make a movie that is his own interpretation of the same story. Taking an approach can be both weak and strong. An example of a weak approach would be when an author uses quotes from the original author to form their own story. A strong approach would be when an author does not use the quotes of the original author but their ideas and style. If an author makes a strong approach they have incorporated the authors ideas into their own work.

I am not quite sure if the New York Times takes an approach when they write their articles because they are just trying to get the news out there. They are not taking the ideas from someone else but are just taking the facts from the situation and putting them to paper. However, The New York Times might take an approach when it quotes other sources or other people but this would be an example of a weak approach. This is not a writing example but an example of taking approach would be fashion. Someone who does not have the money to buy designer clothes will use the ideas and styles of a famous designer and create their own outfits out of clothes they can afford.

Thursday, February 14, 2013

Short Essay 1

Article Rewrite

I rewrote the New York Times article about the horsemeat scandal in Europe. The original article explains the scandal involving horsemeat being found in products that should contain beef. This is occurring throughout many European countries but the original source of the meat is not completely known. I am rewriting the article as if I was a mother living in the U.K. writing a blog. The audience for this blog would be other parents, who probably live in the U.K. or Europe, so when rewriting this article I added some concerns that a parent would have. I did not include all of the details about the whole scandal because the parents reading this blog are most likely more concerned with the consequences for their family. I also added a lot more of ‘my’ personal opinion because as a parent writing a blog I would want my readers to know my opinion on the subject. Also, the other parents reading the blog aren’t interested in the small details about what section of the government are doing the tests but are more interested in the details about the tests actually happening, how it could affect their child, or how they can avoid the scandal.

Are we feeding our children horsemeat?

Last week I had a birthday party for my five-year-old son and we made burgers for the kids. Now I am worried that I unintentionally fed all my son’s friends horsemeat burgers instead of beef burgers. The government has stated that they have found horsemeat in a lot of frozen products that should contain beef. Not only is it bad enough that these products contain horsemeat but also that they can’t pinpoint where the fraud is starting. This scandal is happening throughout Europe in countries such as England, Ireland, France, Poland, the Netherlands, Sweden, and Luxembourg. If I travel with my family and buy food at a local store do I need to worry about what I am feeding my family? Also, horses are treated with different drugs to horses. What if some of the horsemeat that was found in these products had some drug in it that reacted with our bodies and made us sick. The amount of the drug might not affect me as an adult but my little five-year-old son might have an issue because he is so small! They have found a processing plant in Ireland that has been supplying England with products containing horsemeat. Another company in a different country was supplying the meat found in Ireland but that doesn’t mean that there aren’t other processing plants with horsemeat. Maybe if I lived in Ukraine I might expect this but living in Surrey I expect the meat I buy at the store to be what it says it is. Maybe this is my fault for buying frozen foods instead of fresh foods but I should also be able to trust that beef is actually beef. As parents, throwing parties for our children can be expensive so of course we all want to save some money but maybe we should start buying only fresh meat. The companies are recalling products that might contain horsemeat but will that solve the problem? Are the companies going to recall these products but continue to use horsemeat because it is cheaper? We would all like to believe that our governments or the companies themselves should test products before they are packaged and put on the shelves but apparently they don’t already do that. The government is more worried about these companies misleading the buyers than the health and safety concerns. As a mother I am concerned about both sides but more so with the health and safety. Yes I would love to know what is in the products we are buying. However, I am also concerned with the health and safety side because imagine if I were throwing my son a party and was serving these burgers that contain horsemeat and one of the kids at the party is allergic to horsemeat. A kid having an allergic reaction at your child’s party is a huge concern to all of us as parents. I shouldn’t have to worry about giving my son, who has a peanut allergy, something containing almonds that might actually have peanuts in it because they are cheaper to produce. My advice to other parents: throw away frozen beef products that you have bought recently and start to consider buying more fresh meat!

The original article is from The New York Times and is titled: “Horse Meat in Food Stirs a Furor in the British Isles”. http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/09/world/europe/horse-meat-in-food-stirs-furor-in-british-isles.html?hpw&_r=0